Formerly Unsaid
Standing, still unsung,
are the lyrics your name creates.
Remolded by the sun,
reflecting from your face.
Building, still unheard,
is the rhythm of your breath.
Sweeping up the sail,
that beats heavy beneath my chest.
Sitting, still unsaid,
are the words upon my heart.
Melting on my tongue,
and falling to you hard.
Dripping, from my lips,
a bleeding and powerful truth.
Written on every wall —
“I still love you.”
wow…emotive jess…the words too hard to say yet drip from every wall…its the unsaid words that scare me the most honestly…nice piece…
Thank you Brian. 🙂
Really enjoyed this romantic/heartbreak piece. I don’t think love ever dies, even when it is gone.
The greatest thing we can continue to do is say I love you.
Thanks for sharing.
Thank you for reading! 🙂
Wow! Moving, I felt my soul stir.
Awww, thanks 🙂
Hi Jessica,
Beautiful poem 🙂 “Sweeping up the sail,
that beats heavy beneath my chest.” I love that line!
Ina
Thank you so much for stopping by Ina! I really appreciate you reading and am honored you enjoyed it. 🙂
A beautiful poem !
Thank you!
“Sweeping up the sail,
that beats heavy beneath my chest.”
Wonderful lines those 🙂 A beautiful poem heavy with raw, tangible emotion.
I know this feeling all too well. But would never have stated it so beautifully.
I like the photo a lot too!
Thank you Jannie! I thought the picture complimented the poem well. 🙂
I really enjoyed the form of this, the development across stanzas, and the powerful, heartfelt ending
Thank you 🙂
Richly textured.
Thanks Mark. 🙂
Simply beautiful and soul-stirring. And i love the pic!
Thank you, the pic is fun 😉
All the tension in this, all the frustrated yearning! Wow! So glad the title is “Formerly Unsaid.” Hope the outcome was everything you hoped when you finally voiced this!
Thank you Charles, I appreciate you stopping by.
wow. just wow.
Awwwww *blush* thank you.
This is lovely, full of emotion… unsaid words that speak volumes.
Thank you! 🙂
Wow! You practically captivated me with the first line, and it just got better. I love the musicality of your poem. Very smooth and skilfully written. And heart wrenching to boot. Shame too many of us can so easily identify with your piece. Brava!
Yes, it is a shame. Thank you for reading! 🙂
Wonderful job here Jess. You have a great way about harnessing your emotions and really infusing each word you pen. Powerful piece, thanks
Thanks Fred! 🙂
Ahh!!! The most powerful trigger, which can move words to become verse… “I still love you”
I liked it very much.. and could feel the pain.. in all the imagery that you have created with your wonderful words…
Ending was perfect.
Shashi
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Om Namah Shivaya
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Thank you Shashi, much appreciated 🙂
powerful ending line,
“i still love you.”
wow, very touching lines in the middle, enjoyed the read.
🙂
Thank you for stopping by, I appreciate you reading 🙂
Love the weave and flow of the words in this one. My heart sings along with the rhythm, and stops cold at the language and imagery. Really quite a ride!