Pressure irons out the wrinkles,
unfolding the curvatures of injustice.
Filling in, the fissures of us.
Fabric slinks around my body,
molding to my sky.
Breaking down the discomfort,
swimming between,
you and I.
Dehydrated, I drink the snow at the oceans floor.
Holding out my hand.
Holding back the door.
My winter dress is torn,
and your crooked smile
no more.
I love this poem, Jessica. It is deep and beautiful. Your poetry speaks on so many different levels. You are amazing. By the way, it happens to be snowing here. Perfect for a winter dress.
Thank you Haley! You are too kind. I truly appreciate you stopping by and reading. So jealous of your snow!
i like the image of drinking the snow on the ocian floors.
Thank you π
The ending here is great Jess. Really a great job overall, but the ending, from dehydrated down really shines to me. Excellent read. thanks
Thank you Fred. xoxo
snow on the ocean floor. hmmm.. reminds me of this picture sic of the sea by by *hougaard
Wow, what an awesome picture! π
Dehydrated, I drink the snow at the oceans floor.
Beautiful imagery at play here. Well done!
Cheers,
Mark Butkus
Thank you Mark π
lovely jess…i agree you make a great turn with the dehydration and this really takes off from there…great close…
Appreciate that Brian π
Lovely imagery ~ deep, sad and very beautiful…”My winter dress is torn,
and your crooked smile
no more.” Brilliant close..
Thank you Louise, love that you came by. π
Beautiful bit of writing here. Very vivid and surreal at the same time. Nice!
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Thank you! π
REALLY like this–the imagery is smooth and seductive, abrupt and complete, language vivid and beautiful, all the small touches making the delivery system for a fine piece of writing even better.
You are sweet, thank you π
beautiful, great imagery and a lovely flow to the whole piece thank you for sharing x
Thank you for reading.
I love drinking the snow off the ocean floor- nicely penned, Jess π
Thank you Ayala π
I love the image of the winter snow and love the poem as well. It is well-construct and lots of words to ponder. Thanks!
Thank you for reading Danyelle π
YOu evoke a fine dreamy atmosphere with this.
Visiting – and followed – from Author Karma.